Write a letter to your manager telling him about how sitting for long hours for your work has affected your health. In your letter you should mention; 1. What health problems are you facing. 2. Give suggestions as to about what changes can be brought about to reduce the health risks on you and on your colleagues. 3. How will these changes be beneficial to the company when it comes to future employees.

Dear Manager, My name is Joe. I am working as a software engineer in our firm for the
last
two years. The reason for writing
this
letter is to narrate the issues while doing the job on a daily basis. As you are already aware that from the
last
three months workload has been at
the
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peak. In order to maintain the deadline of the
projects
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I need to seat on a chair for more than 10 hours a day.
This
action leads to severe back pain. Due to
this
, in the previous
week
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I approached one doctor
then
he suggested I perform some
yoga
activities as a daily routine to mitigate
this
.
Hence
I would like to request you that if possible
then
kindly hire one
yoga
instructor so that all employees including me all workers will take part actively on daily basis
especially
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in the morning. Even though during high workload schedule we will manage somehow to attend
this
yoga
class. As everyone is aware that by performing some
yoga
on a daily manner, it will definitely lower the back pain issue
moreover
it provides relaxation to all the employees and
also
increases concentration. Owing to
this
workers in our firm able to work smoothly without any hassle. An open line of communication on
this
matter will be greatly helping out. Waiting for your reply. Regards, Joe
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

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  • moreover
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