You have just read an article in an inernational travel magazie which contained some information about your town that is incorrect. Write a letter to the editor of magazie. IN your letter - Correct the information in the article - Explain why it is important for the magazine to give correct information - Suggest what the magazine should do about this situation

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am a regular reader of your

magazine

. I would like to express my concern regarding some incorrect information in your recent publication which is on 10th March. In

this

, the writer described that traditional local food restaurants and high-class luxury hotels are not available in the town of Yangon. As a local citizen of Yangon, I would like to point out that there are plenty of restaurants available local authentic traditional foods

such

as mohinga, noodles with creamy coconut soup along the road of the city centre.

Moreover

, both beautiful classic and modern decorated hotels can be seen near the coastal road of Yangon. it is not acceptable and surprised that

this

kind of misinformation is stated in

such

a popular international travel

magazine

. Your

magazine

is one of well-known travel

journal

Fix the agreement mistake

journals

show examples

so that it should not be simply published for

such

crucial facts. Most travellers and tourists trust your journal and use it as a reliable source of information. As far as I am concerned, the editor should check all the facts in the

magazine

are true and accurate with the real situations before it was published. I would like to see amended information and

also

, an apology remark about

this

in your

publication. I hope you would do the necessary action upon my request. Kind regards, Yan

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