Some people think that government should control the amount of violence in the films and TV programs, in order to reduce the crimes in the society. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

The society in which we are living has
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trend to watch movies and television programs. People seek enjoyment and relaxation by observing electronic
media
. In my opinion, Government should check the level of
violence
in movies and other electronic
media
programs because every scene puts some imprints in the brain. These pictures stay in memories and give
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on personality.
Violence
has multiple impacts on human psychology. Kids choose to get guns and pistols in the form of toys after watching
violence
on
media
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the media
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screen
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screens
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. Some young boys seek pleasure by copying
this
sort of
crimes
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crime
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in real life being impressed by their heroes.
Middle aged
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ladies become frightened while thinking of their family members living in
this
society
that is
having an unusual show of violent episodes. Old guys become depressed after observing brutal clips on the cinema screen.
On the other hand
, some portion of viewers has a propensity to enjoy and
relaxation
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after seeing episodes of thrill and war. Clips without
violence
are not palatable to them. The majority of these people are mature enough, they don’t copy
this
stuff in their real life. They watch the movies, make their brain relaxed and
then
forget the events. In short, Government should make strict
policy
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to control the activity of
media
. Violent episodes may be there but only for the sake of the thrill. The lesson of the story should be very constructive and informative.
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