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The use of recreational drogs is on the increase, especially among young people. Describe the reasons for this worrying issue and provide suggestions to minimize it.

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The issue of
use
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 of recreational
drugs
 always has been
on
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spotlight
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 in our society and today, particularly/especially when the topic is about increasing consumption of
drugs
 between young
generarions
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generations
generation
 around the world. There are two key reasons for
this
 worrying trouble, but some suggestions can help to overcome it. The
first
 and foremost obstacle
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spread
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the spread
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 of
consumption
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the consumption
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 of
drugs
it
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is
it
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 accessibility. Drug dealers have their own system where to distribute narcotics. They analyse the most visited or
concured
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concurred
conquered
 locations by young
people
such
 as clubs and festivals to sell illegal substances.
As an
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efective
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effective
 solution to
this
 situation
,
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 would be to improve the level of security of
such
 events by increasing
a
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 number of guards and applying a thorough checking manner of belongings. Once
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cached
catched
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caught
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 the consumer or the dealer, proceed to extraction of the
drugs
 and
then
 the delivery to the police.
Also
, deny
the
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access to any
sospicius
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suspicious
people
.
Besides
 the accessibility to
the
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recreational
drugs
, there exists another concerning issue, the addiction and dependency that these create. It is universally known that
people
 with problems
such
 as
economical
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,
domestical
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domestic
domestically
 or
selfestime
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self-esteem
 tend to consume
drugs
 to evade themselves from them.
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 lack of support or the difficulty to admit that there exist the problem,
people
 tend to hook up more with
drugs
 and
consequently
 face
the
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the effects of the drug
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drugs
 effects
such
 as unhappiness,
deseases
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diseases
disease
 and so on. So,
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as
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solution
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a solution
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 to these problems, will be to provide more support to
drug addicted
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people
 and make them feel open to talk and ask for
the
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help. To conclude,
reacreational
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recreational
drugs
 have a huge impact on young generations because of
the
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 use between them.
However
, there are several measures that can be taken to minimize and limit
the
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usage. All in all, implementing stricter security procedures and providing more support to the victims, will be a good start to prevent the spread of
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the use
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 of
drugs
 between young
people
.
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