Some people think that wild animals should not be kept in zoos. Others believe that there are good reasons for having zoos. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

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Are

zoos

a good habitant for fauna? It can be argued that keeping

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the zoo

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zoo

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has both

posotive

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positive

and

negetive

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negative

sides. While some in danger

animals

are better to be kept in

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, others should live their natural life.

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essay will discuss both

negetive

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negative

and positive aspects in

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regard. On one hand,

animals

which

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are kept in

zoos

will gradually lose their natural habits. keeping some wild

animals

like tigers and

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area

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is not suitable. These

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animals

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have

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of haunting and because it is not possible to behave

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on their natural habits it is preferable to let them live in their natural

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. It can be

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said

that keeping these

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is commercial.

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, there are some species that are in danger of extinction. There are many threats for them in

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wild life

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. Since

extinction

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of any species haurt

the ecosystems balance

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the balance of the ecosystem

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it is a good idea to protect them in

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the zoo

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zoo

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For instance

, the

turtule

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turtle

nests can be eaten by snails. Other

animals

polar

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bear

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can live in

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icy climate and due to global

warming

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they are

loseing

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losing

their natural

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habitats

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habitants

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. Providing

simulated

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enviroment

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environment

for these

animals

can save them from

dieing

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dying

out. To conclude, I

beleive

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believe

that

zoos

are not a place to entertain people.

Although

it is maybe amusing for children to visit wild

animals

zoos

which they could not visit

them

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in any other way,

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should not be seen

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commercial

instituation

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institution

. It is

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considered a place to protect

animals

from extinction

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severe

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help of

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veterinarian

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