Some people think that wild animals should not be kept in zoos. Others believe that there are good reasons for having zoos. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

Are
zoos
a good habitant for fauna? It can be argued that keeping
animal
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in
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the zoo
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zoo
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has both
posotive
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positive
and
negetive
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negative
sides. While some in danger
animals
are better to be kept in
zoo
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, others should live their natural life.
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negetive
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negative
and positive aspects in
this
regard. On one hand,
animals
which
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are kept in
zoos
will gradually lose their natural habits. keeping some wild
animals
like tigers and
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chinas
in
protected
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the protected
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area
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is not suitable. These
animal
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animals
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have
instinct
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the instinct
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of haunting and because it is not possible to behave
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on their natural habits it is preferable to let them live in their natural
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. It can be
siad
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said
that keeping these
animals
in
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the cage
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is commercial.
On the other hand
, there are some species that are in danger of extinction. There are many threats for them in
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wildlife
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wild life
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wildlife
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. Since
extinction
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the extinction
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of any species haurt
the ecosystems balance
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the balance of the ecosystem
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it is a good idea to protect them in
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the zoo
a zoo
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zoo
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zoos
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.
For instance
, the
turtule
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turtle
nests can be eaten by snails. Other
animals
like
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a polar
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bear
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bears
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can live in
a
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icy climate and due to global
warming
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they are
loseing
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losing
their natural
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habitats
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habitants
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habitats
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. Providing
simulated
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a simulated
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enviroment
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environment
for these
animals
can save them from
dieing
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dying
out. To conclude, I
beleive
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believe
that
zoos
are not a place to entertain people.
Although
it is maybe amusing for children to visit wild
animals
in
zoos
which they could not visit
them
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in any other way,
This
should not be seen
a
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commercial
instituation
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institution
. It is
be
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considered a place to protect
animals
from extinction
by
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severe
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help of
trained
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a trained
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veterinarian
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.
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