In recent years, many small local shops have closed because customers travel to large shopping centers or malls to do their shipping. Is this a positive or a negative development?

From
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past
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the past
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few years,
people
choose to shop from
malls
or shopping
centres
and avoid visiting local
stores
and that
reasons
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reason
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many local
stores
has
shutdown
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shut down
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. In my opinion, shopping
malls
are a positive development for the
nation
and
also
for the citizens as well. Nowadays,
people
prefer to visit shopping
centres
or
malls
for shopping because they find that place convenient and
time saving
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as they do not need to travel
different
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to different
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places to shop
their
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for their
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daily necessities. Apart
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from
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form
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from
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that, shopping
malls
are the
one stop
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one-stop
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shopping solution for everyone because
people
find everything in a single place
such
as clothing
stores
, footwear, jewellery
stores
, cosmetics, eyewear, etc.
Also
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,Also
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it is a sign of
developing
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a developing
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nation
where
malls
and shopping
centres
are constructed in nearby areas for the citizens.
Moreover
,
economical
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the economical
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growth of shopping
malls
have a big role in national GDP growth for every
nation
as well because compare to local
stores
malls
have a huge monthly turnover and from
that
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the government gets
huge
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a huge
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amount of taxes. Apart from that, many foreign shopping brands establish their
stores
in all over the world where they can run and expand their business which is a very good sign of developing for any
nation
and from that business local citizen can get employment opportunities
as well as they
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, as well as they,
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need local employees to run their businesses which can help to reduce unemployment of the
nation
. To sum up
this
, development in shopping
centres
and
malls
are well convenient for
people
in
this
fastest growing
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world, but it
also
develops national economical growth as well which is a positive development for any
nation
.
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