Nowadays the way many people interact with each other has changed because of technology. In what ways has technology affected the types of relationships people make? Is this a positive or negative development?

Technology
has an impact on the interactions people have with each other. It has made people become closer to each other than before and
students
can learn from international teachers.
This
is a positive development because
people’s
relationships have improved.
People’s
interactions with each other have improved because of
the
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technology
. Individuals who live away from their
families
in foreign countries are able to communicate with their
families
face to face using technologies
such
as Whatsapp, Viber and Zoom.
This
makes their relationship stronger as they can communicate when they need moral support.
Furthermore
,
students
now have the ability to learn from international teachers. Earlier
students
had to travel to a foreign country to learn from a foreign teacher, but because of Zoom and Skype
students
can find a teacher online and learn from them.
For instance
, a Spanish learner is able to find a native Spanish speaker through
internet
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and take lessons through Zoom.
This
is a positive development because
people’s
relationships have improved
as a result
of
this
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technological advancements. Individuals living away from their
families
do not feel isolated and they can always keep in touch with their
families
and help each other in need.
This
makes their relationship stronger as they know that their
families
are always with them.
For example
, in the past, Sri Lankans who emigrated to Middle Eastern countries had to wait for a letter to come from home to learn about their family’s news, but now they can share their photos through social media and keep abreast of each other’s daily lives. In conclusion, because of
technology
people have become closer to each other and it created opportunities for
students
to learn from teachers all over the globe.
This
is a positive development since
technology
has made
people’s
interaction with each other stronger.
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