Some countries today have passed laws against smoking tobacco in public buildings such as offices and restaurants. Other countries have no intention of doing this. Consider the possible arguments on both sides of this debate, and reach your own conclusion on which side you favor.

On the one hand, those who use smoking
tobacco
may disagree with
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idea. They may say cite the various benefits about smoking
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aspect of smoking is reducing the possibility of obesity etc. Another main argument is the emotional support that smoker receives from cigarettes, meaning that they feel relaxed and
thus
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.
By contrast
, supporters of reducing cigarettes in public
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accept
this
regulation.
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of believable
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. Examples can be seen in well
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people having morality, where smoking may be considered
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one
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.
Besides
from good aspects, there are many disadvantages stemming from cigarettes
such
as lung cancer, cardiovascular disease, and asthma.
Moreover
, being around a various
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of
tobacco
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user
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is more harmful than breathing polluted air. From
this
, non- smokers would probably suffer from that impact, meaning that it would be unfair to keep it going.
Finally
, it must be said that both
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smokers and nonsmokers should respect the interest of each other. To conclude, having
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against smoking
tobacco
in
public
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building
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buildings
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such
as
restaurant
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restaurants
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and offices
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to be convenient for society as it is
balanced
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solution. It would seem that
this
serves the
interest
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of either
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and or others.
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