Despite health warnings, a large number of people continue to smoke all over the world. Why should we be concerned about this? What solutions would you suggest?

There is no doubt that these days smoking is wide spreading over the world. The question is, what are the problems that smoking might
cause
? and how we could eliminate it?
This
essay will examine the main
problem
smoking can
cause
and possible solutions to
this
problem
. In terms of
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problem
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, the major issue smoking can
cause
is
a
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serious health damage. The main reason to support
this
claim is that when a person starts smoking over
the
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time, the individual will get breathing difficulties, or multiple cancers and sometimes it might
cause
death.
For instance
, many studies were conducted on smoking
people
and all of them showed that every person
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smoke
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had a 99% possibly chance to get cancer.
Thus
, smoking habits often
cause
enormous
heath
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issues and
finally
people
death.
On the other hand
, some potential solutions to
this
problem
are promoting awareness among
people
and
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price
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the price
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of cigarettes.
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informing the general population about the danger of
this
problem
,
people
will be more conscious about their health and will not misuse it by introducing toxic factors to their
body
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.
Moreover
, the
next
step in fighting cigarettes is by increasing
it
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price, with
way
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many
people
will not be able to buy it and it will decrease the level of smoking word-widely. In conclusion,
people
addicted to smoking had a high chance of getting serious health complications.
However
, we can significantly eliminate
this
problem
by enlightening
people
and raising cigarettes cost.
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