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Directors of large organizations earn much higher salaries than ordinary employees do. Some people think it is necessary, but others hold that it is unfair. Discuss both views and give your own opinions.

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Generally speaking, in every setting of governance ,
organisation
 or management, there has to be a proper setting in the hierarchy in maintaining the ordinance of the system .
Directors
 in
this
 case play a pivotal role
towards
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 heading the structure and function of these organisations . Most of the time, they are selected through polling or election by a majority of members in the
organisation
 based on their experience, leadership abilities, qualifications , educational background and reputation with the other. Their work
are
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 generally tedious,
long standing
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 ,more complicated and demands a great deal of responsibility in keeping the
organisation
 successful . Some
directors
 started off as
a
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common
employee
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 and through hard work over the years, they manage to climb the ladder by being elected as a director in the
company
. It is usually very difficult in
this
 case as one has to be not only the most trustable but
also
 the most reputable person among others members of the
organisation
 and especially with his appointed leader and head.
Other type
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 of
directors
 attained their position through relations where the post is being passed down from one generation to another.
For example
 the prime minister in Singapore and monarch in most of the countries. Nepotism is an unfair trade but people has to accept that intelligence , power and wealth
doesn’t
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 come into the hands of everyone. They
also
 need to understand that wealth and assets are important since capital or modal is the
first
 step
that is
 required in setting up a
company
 and hiring employees and it is the
directors
 who will have to face the major losses when the
company
 runs into failure. Summing up ,
directors
 take up a huge role in the success or failure of a
company
 and it is only justifiable if they receive a higher salary for the amount of responsibility which they need to undertake.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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