Some people think that it is best to save money, for example in a bank or savings scheme. Other people feel that money should be spent whenever it is available. Discuss these views and reach an opinion on this debate.

A class of society suggested that
money
should be spent whenever it is available whereas others suggested
to save
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by different means. I completely agree with the state that
money
need
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needs
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to be saved.
Firstly
, the importance of
money
is undeniable.
Money
not only
meet
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meets
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daily needs
also
required
for
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apply
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luxury,health and so on. In our day to
day
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life currency is needed to meet our daily expenses like
to buy
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buying
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consumer goods.
Sometime
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Sometimes
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emmergency
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emergency
happen which required
vast
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a vast
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amount of
money
. In the
aformentioned
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aforementioned
condition lack of sufficient
money
leading
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to someone to
unforseen
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unforeseen
condition. Some unusual circumstances happen in our life like natural calamities which sometimes destroy our harbour. It is the power of
money
by which we can handle
this
condition bravely.
Secondly
, if someone
want
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to go for higher study which usually
require
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requires
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huge
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amount of budget could not be possible without saved deposit.
Thirdly
, sometimes we need
vacation
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to remove our monotony. In
such
case saved
money
will
resque
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rescue
us.
On the other hand
, if
money
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the money
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spent
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is spent
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in
improper
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way it is tough for anybody to meet expenses when someone
in
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is in
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need. In a nutshell, I believe
money
should be saved rather
spent
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than spent
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whenever it is available.
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