A country becomes more interesting and develops more quickly when its population includes a mixture of nationalities and cultures. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

Due to globalization, many countries have
people
from different areas. Some individuals believe that
this
is good for the fast
growth
of a country while others are completely against it. In
this
essay, I will discuss both views and explain why I completely agree with the option that a nation develops more quickly
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a mixture of
people
from different origins. The
first
reason for the undevelopment of a region with a mixture of cultures is understanding especially for developing countries.
People
from
religion
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would prefer to follow their cultural rules over the
other
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and
this
will result in the delay of a decision.
For example
, In
India
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there is
a
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land vacant for building a religious place. But due to multiple cultures, some societies are voting to
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a temple while others are in favour of a gurudwara.
Therefore
, these kinds of issues
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creating a gap in the development of a nation.
On the other hand
, when a region has
people
from mixed areas, they keep on celebrating different festivals which makes their life joyful and interesting.
For example
, Christmas is one of the most celebrated festivals by individuals irrespective of their religion. Another contributing factor is that
people
from different mindset helps in the fast
growth
of
a
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society by sharing their experience and viewpoint. In the US,
for instance
, Indian CEO's are running the most powerful organizations like Adobe, Microsoft.
Therefore
a country develops more quickly when its residents are from different nations. In nutshell,
Although
there are some issues in the
growth
of a country with a mixed population, A nation's
growth
is much faster when it has individuals from multiple origins and
this
is interesting for the population as well which keeps them moving
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