A friend of yours is thinking of going to a camping holiday for the first time this summer. He has asked for your advice. Write a letter to your friends. In your letter, Explain why you think your friend would enjoy camping holiday describe some possible disadvantages say whether you would like to go on camping with your friend this summer

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Hi Raj, How's it going? Hope you're doing well and still have a great time at uni. I heard from you after

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ages. But, I'm so happy after receiving your letter. It's a good decision to go

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holiday camping. I think you enjoy the camping holiday because it's a lot of fun and experience. During

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, you will have a chance to participate in many activities which will boost your confidence and your competitive skills will improve.

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, there're some drawbacks too sometimes especially in summer,the hot weather ruins the trip which doesn't make

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camping enjoyable.

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, in forests, there is a fear of

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wild animals so be careful there. Keep some distance from the dangerous places. I

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want to join you but because of the scholarship exam

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I'm unable to go with you.I have to do preparation for

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. Have a safe trip and click a lot of pictures. Lots of love, BJ

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