You have just read an article in an inernational travel magazie which contained some information about your town that is incorrect. Write a letter to the editor of magazie. IN your letter - Correct the information in the article - Explain why it is important for the magazine to give correct information - Suggest what the magazine should do about this situation

Dear Sir, I am a regular reader of your magazine and I would like to draw your attention to a recently published article in the June 2021 edition claiming continental food is not available in Mumbai. I am afraid that
this
is not correct information. Mumbai is one of the most advanced cities in India and it has a variety of cuisines which include continental food
also
. Your magazine is considered to be a very reliable source of information. Many people like me when travelling to new locations trust details provided in your magazine with closed eyes. So,it is really very crucial to make sure that details published in your articles have been given at most care. If I may suggest some corrective action for the same, Please inform your readers through email or SMS about
this
mistake, so that readers can take precautionary steps for the same.
Also
, corrected information should be published in your
next
month's edition along with apology remarks. Yours faithfully Shravan R Yadav
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