Most Modern Families have both parents working and as a result children spend less time with their parents What is the reason for this? What problems can this cause?

Nowadays in many
families
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it's been observed that
both
parents
are working to provide for their household.
As a
result
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this
has led to many
issues
. In
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I will be discussing the main reason for
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and what problems come with it .
To begin
with , in recent years the cost of living has hit skyrocket so in order to have and maintain a decent
life
both
parents
are obligated to work so the family will have a stable financial income.
Therefore
,
this
has brought many
issues
for our youngsters.
First
and foremost,
children
with
both
parents
working lack parental guidance and feel neglected by their
parents
.
As a
result
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children
will turn to other people for guidance and these individuals may influence them in a bad manner .
For example
, the American
society
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for the positive care of
children
had published an article that showed a correlation between
children
becoming violent and aggressive in school and lack of parental supervision.
moreover
,
children
will grow up not having the love and the support of
parents
in
issues
that they face in daily
life
. In
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they will end up with weak personalities and no emotional bond
to
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their
parents
and
this
will affect their relationship with their own
children
in the future.
Furthermore
,
children
may feel abandoned by their
parents
and not loved. Due to the fact that
parents
do not have the time available to care for their
children
sufficiently.
Also
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children
may perform poorly at school because
parents
are busy working and no one is paying attention to the child's education.
As a
result
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they may not have good qualifications to get a decent job .
In addition
to that
parents
may argue about whose job is more important and who needs to take time off for domestic
issues
which may lead to
a
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distress in the home and eventually
this
will affect
children
in a negative way. To sum up,
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because
of the increases in the daily
life
cost , in most houses
both
parents
have to work to provide for their offspring.
This
has led to many
issues
that will affect mainly our youngsters in their adult
life
later on.
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