A friend of yours is thinking of going to a camping holiday for the first time this summer. He has asked for your advice. Write a letter to your friends. In your letter, Explain why you think your friend would enjoy camping holiday describe some possible disadvantages say whether you would like to go on camping with your friend this summer

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Dear Sana, I hope you are doing well. I'm writing to give you some advice

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your upcoming camping holiday. I believe that you will have

great

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summertime

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summer time

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the Green Mountain Camp. It is a wonderful place to feel natural scenes and release your stressful works.

Furthermore

, you would be meet new friends who are very kind and

humourous

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. They are always enthusiastic to guide their experiences.

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, there are some problems

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camp in the mountain.

First

, because insects like bugs or flies are everywhere, you should bring a net to protect yourself.

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place is far from the main street, so it is difficult to buy stuff or

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. You should prepare all

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things. I regret that my course is going

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week, so I can't travel with you. I hope to hear

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experiences, why don't we hang out after you return? Wish you all the best, Wendy.

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