Some people do not go directly to college but travel or work for a short time. Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

During these modern days,
students
have an opportunity to earn before even completing their academic calendar due to technology.Some individuals get employed or go on a vacation for a limited time rather than going to
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college as soon.The drawbacks are more than merits since the
students
have a high chance of early marriage and dropping out of
school
Firstly
,learners who travel or work before attending college find themselves having responsibilities just by the touch of money.
This
is because
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ideally they end up getting married.Due to the technology being prominent that they get exposed in a way they forget about education.
In addition
,just being away from the learning environment keep the thought of going back to
school
away.
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,in 2019 the star newspapers reported that public vehicle conductors are
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four leavers with high grades.
Therefore
,it is apparent that the exposure of not going on with schooling is high once the scholar travel or work before going to an institute.
Secondly
,dropping out of
school
is a major consequence especially when an undergraduate has tasted money that they feel held on from earning or going for vacations.
Consequently
,they perform badly as their interest is disrupted from the usual flow of being in a learning environment,
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,in
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the government published a policy in 2021 for the transition of
students
from secondary to university.Indeed,in the modern world
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to traditional times
school
dropout is high and again many
students
in higher learning are multitasking. To sum up,the society stopped reporting immediately to university rather
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abroad or labour for a short time has led to several scholars be multitasking due to many
resposibility
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responsibility
.
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