Many young people choose to take a year out between finishing school and starting university in order to gain work experience or to travel. The experience of non-academic life this offers benefits the individual when they return to education. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

A gap year (a special
time
before getting a higher education) becomes more and more popular all over the world. From my point of view,
this
is an excellent tendency, because it gives teenagers a plethora of opportunities.
Firstly
,
this
age is the best
time
for travelling – young people don’t need a lot much money to have a great
time
.
Also
, they don’t have as
much
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responsibilities as working people who must care,
for instance
, care about children and elderly relatives.
Secondly
, teenagers can use
this
period to start working in the field they are interested in. Often it is much better to spend a year
for
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working at the wrong place than spend years getting a degree
which
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is useless for you.
Thirdly
, students who already know their dream job can spend a year preparing for university exams and to get at
a
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best university. A lot of people are able to improve their scores if they don’t have to go to daily school classes. Nowadays, a motivated student needs only the Internet and enough
time
. To sum up, the
time
spent away from education gives the person the chance to reflect on life and any important decisions before signing up for a lengthy and expensive period of study.
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