Some people view teenage conflict with their parents as a necessary part of growing up, whilst others see it as something negative which should be avoided. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

it's clear, that teenager's conflict with
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their
parents is a serious problem, but why do
people
think that it is a necessary part of growing up? And why it should be minimized. At
first
, let's discuss why do some
people
think why are
arguments
with parents are necessary. In my
opinion
, some
people
think so because they are planning to make their
child
stress-sustainable and think faster in
arguments
,  but they don't look
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child's
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mental health, which can be damaged during lots of
arguments
.
Secondly
, the other
opinion
- if you have
ability
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not to argue with your
teenager
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child
- you should avoid it. It is the
oposite
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opposite
of
first
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opinion
,
people
who are closer to
this
opinion
will be more supportive and understandable parents. Their
child
will not have any mental health issues, but they will have problems during
arguments
and they will not have any stress protection. The
last
thing
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is that
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am closer to the
second
opinion
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because
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think that
people
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worth
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more, than just being better
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something.
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