Some students tend to travel after finishing school and spend time working somewhere instead of going to the university directly. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this development? (May 2021) Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words.

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there are many students who want to take

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in their

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after

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high school and pursue work in

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new geography. As the coin has both

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faces,

this

situation

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has pros and cons. The benefit of discontinuing one’s academic career and

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pursing

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a job would be that they can experience

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culture

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and understand the hardships of

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. Surviving on their own income gives an individual, independence and they will become strong as they are stepping out of their comfort zone. The drawback of taking

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before going to pursue

further

education

is that they would settle

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older age than usual.

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a chain reaction, everything in their

life

would be delayed due to

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of time they have taken to explore and work. To put the case in point , I am acquainted with a person, who discontinued his

education

to explore the world and know new

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while working as a

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handyman

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handy man

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This

experience has brought a great impact

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his

life

and during his

further

education

. He is now one of the successful businessmen in the Southern part of India. Another scenario where a person discontinued

from

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his

education

to explore but the outcome was devastating.

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time he has taken to take a gap in his

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turned out to be the worst decision , due to the financial problems his family has faced. In conclusion, it varies from individual to individual. One has to consider all the parameters before taking

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life

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