Cycling is a healthier and more environmentally friendly form of transport. Nevertheless, cycling is getting less popular. What are the reasons of this trend? What can be done to make cycling more popular?

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advancement.
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human beings have started to look for lethargic ways, rather than looking after their body and the environment as a whole.
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,mother nature is already filled with enough methane gas to cause global warming and natural resource depletion. So today's millennials have brought forth the idea of reducing emissions by traversing by using cycles. Studies have shown that people who cycle a lot are
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happier along with improved heart rate and reduced
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diabetes
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the
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emission
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is an astonishing 0% which will reduce global warming and
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our body healthy as well. But the influence of cycling is not widespread due to the aesthetic social status that people have engraved in their minds resulting
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think that cycling is not a good option to choose from when comparing it to other means of transport. The only
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for cycling to be used as a proper
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for commuting is for the society as a whole to realise the future would be in a devastated and depressing state that life would be put into if not for developing means
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as a bicycle. Government's can take responsibility by organising marathon drive camps which can motivate children to exercise and travel more
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friendly. Social influencers can execute by promoting to their audience about the factual benefits of cycles and by how they are the most
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option. In conclusion, in order for change to
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we must take a step forward so that
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future generations can protect
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planet and as well as be in shape.Hope is never lost let's aggrandise cycling as a sport and a
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giving back to
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beautiful planet.
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