The tables below give information about sales of fairtrade - labelled coffee and bananas in 1999 and 2004 in five european countries

The tables below give information about sales of fairtrade - labelled coffee and bananas in 1999 and 2004 in five european countries
The data reported in the two tables provide insights
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the
coffee
and
bananas
trade in five
countries
of the European continent. The tables present a comparison of
sales
revenue between the years 1999 and 2004. Generally speaking, the
sales
of
coffee
had
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increased between 1999 and 2004 in all five
countries
whereas
the
sales
of
bananas
increased in only three
countries
and decreased in two of them.
However
,
Switzerland
was on top in trading
bananas
and
coffee
in the year 1999 but in the year 2004 UK surpassed
Switzerland
in the
coffee
trade
while
in the market of
bananas
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Switzerland
managed to maintain its position. Talking specifically about the
coffee
market,
Swiss
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led the trade in 1999 accounting for 3 million euros but
2004
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recorded a sale of 20 million euros from the UK which was significantly higher than the other four nations.
Although
, Sweden had the lowest sale of
coffee
in both the years 1999 and 2004 quantifying
to
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0.8 and 1 million euros respectively. The banana market, between 1999 and 2004, experienced a rise in
sales
in
Switzerland
, the UK, and Belgium
whereas
Sweden and Denmark recorded a downfall. Surprisingly, the analysis reveals that the total
sales
made by
countries
other than
Switzerland
are less than half the
sales
of
Switzerland
in both the years 1999 and 2004.
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