The charts below show the levels of participation in education and science in developing and industrialised countries in 1980 and 1990
The given bar graphs depict the different
level
of students involvements in various sectors which Fix the agreement mistake
levels
held
among developing and industrialized Add a missing verb
were held
countries
in the time period of
1980 and 1990.
Change preposition
between
Overall
, it is apparent that,
Industrialized regions had the highest Remove the comma
apply
level
of participation in all sectors such
as education, science and research for both years.
It is clear from the chart that the participation of
education from developing nations was around 2 in 1980 and 3 in 1990. Change preposition
in
On the contrary
, the industrialized sector in average schooling rapidly increased to 8 in 1980 and 10 in 1990.Similarly
, the developing
Correct quantifier usage
number of developing
countries
in science
domain Correct article usage
the science
was
low when compared to industrialized Change the verb form
were
countries
in both years. Precisely, 40 in 1980 which soared to approximately 70 in 1990
In research
and development stream, the Correct article usage
the research
level
of engagement was below 50 in 1980 and 1990 for developing countries
, whereas
the industrialized countries
depict that the level
dramatically raised to 150 in 1980 and 400 in 1990.Submitted by priyankasumathi21 on
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