The charts below show the levels of participation in education and science in developing and industrialised countries in 1980 and 1990

The charts below show the levels of participation in education and science in developing and industrialised countries in 1980 and 1990
The given bar graphs depict the different
level
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levels
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of students involvements in various sectors which
held
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were held
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among developing and industrialized
countries
in the time period
of
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1980 and 1990.
Overall
, it is apparent that
,
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Industrialized regions had the highest
level
of participation in all sectors
such
as education, science and research for both years. It is clear from the chart that the participation
of
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education from developing nations was around 2 in 1980 and 3 in 1990.
On the contrary
, the industrialized sector in average schooling rapidly increased to 8 in 1980 and 10 in 1990.
Similarly
, the
developing
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number of developing
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countries
in
science
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the science
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domain
was
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low when compared to industrialized
countries
in both years. Precisely, 40 in 1980 which soared to approximately 70 in 1990 In
research
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the research
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and development stream, the
level
of engagement was below 50 in 1980 and 1990 for developing
countries
,
whereas
the industrialized
countries
depict that the
level
dramatically raised to 150 in 1980 and 400 in 1990.
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