In the modern world today the rate of divorce is rising dramatically in most societies. What are the main reasons for getting divorced? What can be done to solve the issue?

Nowadays dissolution between people is increasing in many countries, especially during the quarantine due to high demand from society participants. There are several major causes
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lead to
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situation. Fortunately,
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is dramatically going up, there are ways where family separation issues can be solved. The subject has
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further
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First
of all, the main reason
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divorce is that people now do not afraid to tell what they want and what they feel.
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,
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ago the normal situation in Kazakhstan was that newlyweds have to live with
parents
of male, and
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has no right to see her
parents
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the
first
year.
This
led to that girls had a huge pressure, with new family rules and newborn on the hand.
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, adults influenced by the movies choose their partner not just because of his nature, but because of person’s financial ability, status and
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beautifulness. To be more precise, when they get married and start to live together, they are showing their true nature and understand that made
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.
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, while Coronavirus made people live locked in their houses and spend time together, they become to know each other much better than before, and it is resulted in raising
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rate in Japan
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67%. Fortunately, there are several things that can be done to cure these problems.
Firstly
, when becoming a family, man
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to inform his
parents
that he will live with his family, that he will be independent and responsible. Being only by your own family resolves a lot of
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.
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solution is
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active propaganda from the government and
parents
to youngest, that they should not judge by some criteria, as choosing a partner should be for
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, till the end of life. To conclude, it is evident that there
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lot of
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causes of divorces between married couples, but all the causes have solutions and alternatives.
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