Many young people choose to take a year out between finishing school and starting university in order to gain work experience or to travel. The experience of non-academic life this offers benefits the individual when they return to education. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Taking a
year
gap between finishing school and starting university in order to gain some
work
experience or travel somewhere is a very debatable
decision
as there are some advantages and disadvantages to it which are discussed in below paragraphs. The
decision
of taking off for a
year
is a bold move that a student should think thoroughly before making it. After finishing school some students opt to
work
in their family business or go
to
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abroad for a trip where they could gain some real-world experience but it has been observed among those students some of them starts applying for university while some do not. Those who didn't apply might be because they have lost interest in studying by the time or could be satisfied in their
work
. Loss of interest in the study means restricting yourself to new possibilities which is one of the downsides of
this
decision
. Another one is for those who continue with their studies as they will be lagging behind in terms of placement opportunities. It will become a disadvantage for them when they will start applying for companies because candidates of the same age as them will be prefered by the hiring team due
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year
difference in college. There are some benefits of
this
decision
which are discussed here. People who
work
after their schooling becomes more mature and more focused because they have seen how things
work
in the real world so their mind is
also
prepared
accordingly
.
This
opens their mind and helps in make better decisions in choosing the right career path for themselves in college.
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it is true that they will lag behind with their fellow mates of the same age in terms of opportunities but their minds will be strong enough to handle the pressure as their minds will be more focused on their goal.
On the other hand
, people who join a college after their trip tends to be more active in extra-curricular and have good managing skills which will help them in future in managing a team in a company or even a company of their own. In my opinion, leaving the short-term downsides of
this
decision
, I believe it is a good
decision
to take a
year
gap and explore the world to get some real-world exposure as it improves the
decision
-making ability of an individual and helps in choosing a good career for themself which they won't regret in future.
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