There is growing evidence that man-made activities are making temperature higher. What might be the man-made causes of temperature rising ?

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It is inevitable that global warming is the burning issue of the day. There are many signs through which one can undoubtedly observe the grievous

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in the climate.

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most of them are directly or indirectly instigated by

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activities

. The different causes will be briefly discussed in the essay.

To begin

with, the

Earth

is getting hotter on an unprecedented scale. There are several gases present in

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's atmosphere which causes the increment in

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temperature

. The emission of carbon

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oxide gas is one of the key factors in

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. CO2 gas is emitted by numerous vehicles and factories,

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thickness of the ozone layer.

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harmful rays like UV rays fall directly on

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's surface and eventually heat the planet.

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, due to

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in population, people are cutting innumerable forests to get homes and factories. The

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do not think about the

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trees and plants,

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, there is a massive decrement has been seen in oxygen. Oxygen is a fundamental gas to lower down the rise in

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temperature

but in the absence of

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global

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warming

. In conclusion, there are extreme climate change

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nowadays,

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will detriment the atmosphere gradually. The people should understand their responsibilities and act wisely in

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of saving our

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environment

and lives. If it is not done,

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Earth

will be in danger.

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There is growing evidence that man-made activities are making temperature higher. What might be the man-made causes of temperature rising ?

Fully explain your ideas

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