There is growing evidence that man-made activities are making temperature higher. What might be the man-made causes of temperature rising ?

It is inevitable that global warming is the burning issue of the day. There are many signs through which one can undoubtedly observe the grievous
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in the climate.
Although
there are several reasons behind
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most of them are directly or indirectly instigated by
humans
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activites
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activities
. The different causes will be briefly discussed in the essay.
To begin
with, the
Earth
is getting hotter on an unprecedented scale. There are several gases present in
Earth
's atmosphere which causes the increment in
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temperature
. The emission of carbon
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di
oxide gas is one of the key factors in
this
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. CO2 gas is emitted by numerous vehicles and factories,
this
action
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to
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thickness of the ozone layer.
Hence
harmful rays like UV rays fall directly on
Earth
's surface and eventually heat the planet.
Moreover
, due to
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in population, people are cutting innumerable forests to get homes and factories. The
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masses
do not think about the
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adverse
effect of
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trees and plants,
consequently
, there is a massive decrement has been seen in oxygen. Oxygen is a fundamental gas to lower down the rise in
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temperature
but in the absence of
this
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contributes
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global
warmong
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warming
. In conclusion, there are extreme climate change
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occurs
nowadays,
this
will detriment the atmosphere gradually. The people should understand their responsibilities and act wisely in
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of saving our
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environment
and lives. If it is not done,
then
the future of our new generation
as well as our
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Earth
will be in danger.
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