Some people feel unsafe either staying at home or going out. What are the possible reasons for this? What can be done to address this issue?

Do you ever feel unsafe yourself when
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nervous about their
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fault of mass media. every day we
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enormous amounts of information from every single moment. and we might use them in
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world.
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not all news could be “good”. despite
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, economic or
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news,
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we do know about new innovations or projects to
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about horrible crimes in all details. maybe
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to make our lives
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, but it sounds like propaganda of violence.
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the other hand, it’s just their job.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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