Countries are becoming more and more similar because people are able to buy the same products any ware in the world. Is it a positive or negative development?

Thanks to globalization, the world is getting smaller.
This
leads to some situations. Every
people
have a chance to buy any products independent
from
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where it
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.
This
affects
people’s
look and countries’ too. Countries have similar
appearence
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appearance
nowadays. In my opinion,
this
is not a completely bad situation but
people
be cautious
on
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that. In
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I will explain why I think like
this
. Because of the
tecnological
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technological
improvements, interaction among countries increase.
This
affects
people’s
daily life.
For instance
, wherever
people
live, every
people
have a chance to buy clothes
in
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a
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same brand. Because
people’s
looks reflect their
culture
this
has a negative impact on it.
Culture
is the term
which
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includes
people’s
appearence
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appearance
, attitudes to life. If every
people
have
a
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same look or similar items,
culture
will
deprived
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from
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them.
Moreover
, it will affect
tourisim
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tourism
in a negative way.
Tourist
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want to see different items, features when they visit a country. If every country
have
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a similar appearance,
foreing
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foreign
countriswill
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countries will
country will
not attract tourist.
On the other hand
, having similar items has some positive sides. It can be seen that
people
have
same
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opportunities even if they live
in
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different sides of the world.
Furthermore
, as
people
have a chance to buy similar goods, they can feel more comfortable when they go abroad. In conclusion, I
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believe
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belive
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believe
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that having similar
opportunies
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opportunities
is an
advantegous
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advantageous
situation. Adapting
a
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countries’ life is getting
more
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easier.
However
, it has a negative impact on
culture
which is significantly important. To protect their
culture
,
people
should pay attention
on
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it. Even if they live in a global world, they keep their traditions.
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