Some people think that it is good for a country’s culture to show imported foreign film and TV programmes. Others think that it is better to produce these locally. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Art forms have progressed over various countries over generations. Telecommunication advances have enabled humans to share

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information on

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scale. There have been insecurities about

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foreign films

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films

challenging the perspectives of local

communitites

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communities

. I voice for introducing ourselves to the foreign

films

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essay, I will state reasons to support my

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. Local

communities

have directly or indirectly expressed insecurities about the foreign

culture

influencing their younger generations in a negative manner. It is accepted by the masses that foreign media magnifies certain incidents and represents them as flaws about their

culture

. Certain media houses have released research stating that foreign content released in India, attracts the younger generation by depicting false images of adultery in western society. These movies have been seamlessly hiding up the consequences of

such

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traditions formed by the

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Indian society.

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observations by the influenced media houses

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rooted the insecurities deep in certain

communities

. No matter the era, outdated cultures were uprooted by either the oppressed or intellectually strong groups. Studies have shown 65% of the foreign

films

introduce us to the cultural traditions India has been missing. Talking about Indian

culture

, various inhumane practices were abolished from Indian

culture

after

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had ruled India. Sati – the practice of a widow giving up her life, child marriage, restricting women from education are a few to be named.

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was possible only when the local

communities

were exposed to the better parts of

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world.

Such

mass attracting art form, will

thus

only help the local

communities

to reshape their

culture

and be in sync with the world

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. Foreign

films

have been known to introduce us to the unseen facets of the new

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will help improve the traditions of any

culture

and should be welcomed with open arms.

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Some people think that it is good for a country’s culture to show imported foreign film and TV programmes. Others think that it is better to produce these locally. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Fully explain your ideas

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In many countries, students do not want to study science subjects at university. Why is this happening? What will be the consequences of this for society?

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Caring for children is probably the most important job in any society. Because of this, all mothers and fathers should be required to take a course that prepares them to be good parents. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this view?

Some people think that it is necessary to travel abroad to learn about other countries, but others think that it is not necessary to travel abroad because all the information can be seen on TV and the internet. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.