Some people think that it is good for a country’s culture to show imported foreign film and TV programmes. Others think that it is better to produce these locally. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Art forms have progressed over various countries over generations. Telecommunication advances have enabled humans to share
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information on
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scale. There have been insecurities about
a foreign
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foreign films
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films
challenging the perspectives of local
communitites
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communities
. I voice for introducing ourselves to the foreign
films
. In
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. Local
communities
have directly or indirectly expressed insecurities about the foreign
culture
influencing their younger generations in a negative manner. It is accepted by the masses that foreign media magnifies certain incidents and represents them as flaws about their
culture
. Certain media houses have released research stating that foreign content released in India, attracts the younger generation by depicting false images of adultery in western society. These movies have been seamlessly hiding up the consequences of
such
actions against the
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traditions formed by the
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Indian society.
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observations by the influenced media houses
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rooted the insecurities deep in certain
communities
. No matter the era, outdated cultures were uprooted by either the oppressed or intellectually strong groups. Studies have shown 65% of the foreign
films
introduce us to the cultural traditions India has been missing. Talking about Indian
culture
, various inhumane practices were abolished from Indian
culture
after
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had ruled India. Sati – the practice of a widow giving up her life, child marriage, restricting women from education are a few to be named.
This
was possible only when the local
communities
were exposed to the better parts of
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world.
Such
mass attracting art form, will
thus
only help the local
communities
to reshape their
culture
and be in sync with the world
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. Foreign
films
have been known to introduce us to the unseen facets of the new
culture
. These experiences
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will help improve the traditions of any
culture
and should be welcomed with open arms.
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