Nowadays many people choose to be self-employed, rather than to work for a company or organization. Why might this be the case? What could be the disadvantages of being self-employed? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

In modern times, it is more preferable
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individuals to be
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an entrepreneur
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entrepreneur
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entrepreneurs
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instead
of working for
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a big
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employer
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employers
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. The reason behind
this
is
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to work independently. But working independently have some negative sides as it is a risky attempt.
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illustrate possible drawbacks for
this
issue. The main reason why so many people are engaging in their own
business
is the freedom to run their
business
independently. An entrepreneur can take the
decision
rapidly in terms of
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situation
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while running their own
business
.
For example
. while running
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independently, one person
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not have to wait for the upper official
decision
which would lead to
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in time to grab a new
business
. By taking
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decision
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,
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self employed
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businessmen can prosper in their
business
and maximize their profit.
However
, the trend has certain drawbacks which we need to consider in the long run.
Firstly
,
stress
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of taking
risk
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in
business
have to be taken fully by the
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person.
In contrast
, in large
companies
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different
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take collaborative decisions for taking the risk of whole
business
matters.
Secondly
. Investment is another issue for the individual who independently
run
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their
business
as they lack short of
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funds
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or investors while doing their
business
. In these cases, they have to seek for fund
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which is not an easy task leading to raise the stress on
individual
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. In conclusion, as it is certain that the individuals are choosing their own way of living independently as they can make
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a decision
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decision
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in the crisis moment. Due to lack of
fund
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and not having
to
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much dividend
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to share duties could lead that
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person to be
over stressed
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. In my opinion
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can give special support to
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run their
business
with less effort.
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