As the world becomes technologically advanced computers are replacing more and more jobs.Describe some job positions that may be lost because of computers and discuss at least one problem that may result.

In the age of industrialization and modernization, technological breakthroughs are reforming the way our lives are operated.
Computers
are becoming an indispensable part
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and gradually replacing humans in many jobs.
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description of some works that can disappear due to
computers
and discussing some issues. The
first
position that may be vanished
as a result
of technological innovation is the mailman. People are no longer interested in correspondence.
Instead
of writing letters with their hands, wrapping them in uncheap covers, taking them to the post office and waiting for several days or even one week until they are delivered, people now would rather use emails or chatting applications. Within one single
second
, your texts are sent, and
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more than one minute, you receive the messages back just for free. Another job I want to talk about is
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accountant. An ordinary worker can work from 8 to 12 hours a day, and sometimes they
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serious mistakes that do huge damage to the organization.
In contrast
, an accounting robot is able to work
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continuously
24 hours a day, 7 days a week without any breaks and no faults are made at all during the process. They absolutely outweigh the functions of
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humans in
this
aspect.
Nevertheless
, that
computers
are now taking the works that
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should
be belonged to humans
also
results in some consequences.
Firstly
, it aggravates unemployment. Never before, do we see an increasingly alarming rate of unemployment like that
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It is really a burden that our society
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to put up with.
Last
but not least, that depending too much on
computers
is a disaster in emergencies. They are all connected to the Internet, so they are easily broken into and the
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dilemma
is unimaginable. In conclusion, scientific advances are a revolution to our world with their outstanding functions.
However
, our missions are to use them in the right way
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and minimize their negative impacts on our lives
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