many manufactured food and drink product contain high level of sugar, which causes many health problem. Sugary products should be made more expensive to encourage people to consume less sugar.

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many manufactured food and drink product contain high level of sugar, which causes many health problem. Sugary products should be made more expensive to encourage people to consume less sugar.

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Tourism is increased in many countries. Does tourism brings more advantages or disadvantages to a country

With deforestation, urban development and illegal hunting, many animal species are becoming endangered as they lose their habitat and some are even threatened to the point of extinction. Do you think it is important to protect animal? What measures can be taken to deal with this problem?

Many people think modern communication technology is having some negative effects on social relationships. Do you agree or disagree?

Some people think planning future is a waste of time and people should focus on the present. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Scientists believe that the world is in danger due to environmental changes. Some people say that personal lifestyle changes should be made to reduce the damage to environment, while others think that the government should do something to help. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.