It is quite common for both parents in a family to work. Sometimes this is because they need two salaries to survive whereas other times it is their choice. What are the problems you see in this situation? How does this affect the children and the family life?

There is an adage in my dialect that says one hand can not conveniently carry a load on the head the way two hands
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would
carry the same load, it is good if
both
parents
work in the family but it has its own disadvantages
also
.
Firstly
,the attention of the
parents
are divided,the father goes out in the morning and comes back late,the wife does the same thing. The
children
would be left with little supervision.
Children
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to be
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nurtured
and cared for,these
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time, a
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not a divided one. Another problem is because
both
parents
are always working, there will be less bonding time for the family as a whole, the
children
can not even fully understand what it means to be bonded.We have homes where
parents
do not even know the kinds of friends their wards keep more or less talk of their
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tv shows. The
children
tend to grow apart from their
parents
even though they live under the same roof.
Furthermore
,because the kids are left alone to themselves most times,they are automatically licensed to grow independently.They take decisions most times by themselves no matter how irrational those decisions can be. Research has it that
children
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both
parents
work are more prone to giving in to peer pressures.
Hence
you see teenagers being lured by their peers into taking drugs,
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clubbing and other habits that are unbecoming just because they lack full parental care
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and
attention.They decide what to do and what not to do.
Lastly
,the lifestyle of not having
both
parents
around tend to form a fundamental psyche in the kids that once they grow up their homes should be run the way their
parents
ran theirs,
both
parents
have to work just to make ends meet and the cycle continues for generations unborn.
Children
learn by what they see,so their own lives normally
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patterned how they were brought up. Family life has to be complete
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and enjoyed,these can not be totally achieved if
both
parents
are working.
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