It is quite common for both parents in a family to work. Sometimes this is because they need two salaries to survive whereas other times it is their choice. What are the problems you see in this situation? How does this affect the children and the family life?

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There is an adage in my dialect that says one hand can not conveniently carry a load on the head the way two hands

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would

carry the same load, it is good if

both

parents

work in the family but it has its own disadvantages

also

Firstly

,the attention of the

parents

are divided,the father goes out in the morning and comes back late,the wife does the same thing. The

children

would be left with little supervision.

Children

needs

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to be

nutured

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nurtured

and cared for,these

requires

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time, a

whole time

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not a divided one. Another problem is because

both

parents

are always working, there will be less bonding time for the family as a whole, the

children

can not even fully understand what it means to be bonded.We have homes where

parents

do not even know the kinds of friends their wards keep more or less talk of their

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tv shows. The

children

tend to grow apart from their

parents

even though they live under the same roof.

Furthermore

,because the kids are left alone to themselves most times,they are automatically licensed to grow independently.They take decisions most times by themselves no matter how irrational those decisions can be. Research has it that

children

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both

parents

work are more prone to giving in to peer pressures.

Hence

you see teenagers being lured by their peers into taking drugs,

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clubbing and other habits that are unbecoming just because they lack full parental care

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and

attention.They decide what to do and what not to do.

Lastly

,the lifestyle of not having

both

parents

around tend to form a fundamental psyche in the kids that once they grow up their homes should be run the way their

parents

ran theirs,

both

parents

have to work just to make ends meet and the cycle continues for generations unborn.

Children

learn by what they see,so their own lives normally

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patterned how they were brought up. Family life has to be complete

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and enjoyed,these can not be totally achieved if

both

parents

are working.

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