All students should study art and music in school. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

As they say,
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art
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of life. From the chirping of birds in the morning to walls with mesmerising paintings ,
art
and
music
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our daily routine. Something so intricate
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thus
requires our special effort and attention to get inculcated in the lives of our students. Religiously speaking, the chanting of prayers and the different patterns made on the floor are not only
asethetic
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aesthetic
to watch but
also
an important landmark of our culture.
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Secondly
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,
art
and
music
have been a
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constant
content
employer since
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era. From the era of
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musical
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to now hip hop , from kathak to salsa and from patterns on the floors to the beautiful paintings on the walls , we have witnessed changing trends but what has remain
contant
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content
constant
is the value and pride of the artist.
Art
and
music
have
also
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with scientific knowledge . The intricacies of architecture, the power of sound energy and the use of patterns and postures have given a new vision to the human mind.
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its role in our health and lifestyle ranging from morning meditation to exercise and busting stress cannot be forgotten.
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, teaching students
art
and
music
will give them a more fulfilling life and additional skills to ponder
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