Many people believe that it is easier to have a healthy lifestyle in the countryside. Other believe that there are health benefits to living in cities. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Most people prefer to move to their hometown after retirement, in the reason of a claim that living in a rural area provides a healthier living condition, while a contrary view is there are the same advantages of

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in urban. I strong believe citizens will be

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healthy as rural dwellers if they control their food and do exercise. One of the benefits of living in the countryside is

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the natural

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environment which consists of

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atmosphere. There are

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constructions, factories and vehicles which provide greenhouse gas emissions,

meanwhile

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air pollution is a major concern in the cities.

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may have adverse

health

effects especially impacting on

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the lung

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lung

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the reason of

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, everyone usually has a trip with family or friends during

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a holiday

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natural tourist places

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as sea, mountain and

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, that they can refresh and breathe in more oxygen.

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a breath

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of fresh air alone does not improve our

health

, individuals should exercise daily. According amenities in cities

such

as fitness

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are

assessible

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accessible

assessable

, urban dwellers can work out at the gym which has a lot of convenient equipment and

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trainers.

Besides

that, there are many parks in Phnom Penh city, which elders have been jogging, bicycling and dancing as a group in the early morning and evening. In conclusion, even though living in

countryside

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the countryside

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provide a clean air environment which may lead to

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good

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, in my opinion, citizens can maintain their

health

by regular exercise which is easy to assess in the urban.

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Many people believe that it is easier to have a healthy lifestyle in the countryside. Other believe that there are health benefits to living in cities. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Include an introduction and conclusion

University should accept the equal number of male and female students in each subject. To what extent do you agree or disagree with the above statement.

Some people think certain prisoners should be made to do up and community work to what extent do you agree ? instead of being put behind bars.

Obesity is a serious problem in many countries, especially in rich countries. Discuss ways to solve the problem. Provide specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Public transportation is a great way to travel, particularly within a metropolis. The metro is the most convenient way to get around a city. Do you agree or disagree?

In some countries owning a home rather than renting one is considered very important. Why might this be the case? Is this a positive or negative development?