Some people believe that the best way to control accidents on city streets is to lower the speed limit but others think there are more important issues that need attention before roads can be safe. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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believe
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that accident control requires speed limits,while others think other issues need to be settled
first
.I will discuss and give my views in the below essay.
Accidents
cannot be controlled by speed,people have taken driving as an easy task and
alot
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a lot
of misuse of cars and mode of transport has been taken for granted as long as one owns a car and has a licence they believe they are allowed to drive not considering the levels of expertise.
Accidents
do not occur necessarily on or in motor
vechiles
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vehicles
it involves passengers,pedestrians,motorcycles, bicycles,carts etc,so restricting speed is not the main issue,main concern jets in our
trainings
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and setting apart pedestrian walks,bicycles and carts paths
this
will reduce on matters related to
accidents
.
On the other
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peak velocity can help a great deal,most drivers love speed and with no
limits
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they will drive as crazy as they want,as long as they arrive
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their destination forgetting the journey cut short.
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there is a
a
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road in my country that was in the recent years been involved in grisly road
accidents
,but when the government came up with the idea of terminal velocity
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misadventures are reported on
this
highway,to some extent it does work but poor
roads
will
also
contribute to mishaps on our
roads
. To sum up,in my opinion, permitted speed helps ,but awareness and decent
roads
will come in handy to control
number
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of calamities that we see on our
roads
on a daily basis
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