Meat production requires relatively more land than crop production. Some people think that as land is becoming scarce, the world’s meat consumption should be reduced. What measures could be taken to reduce the world’s meat consumption? What kinds of problem such measures cause?

Animal’s manufacturing obtains a large scale of
land
expansion while comparing to agricultural
producing
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process. The
problem
that many
people
are considered
that
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the
using
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of
land
for
meat
production would meet
consequence
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as the
land
scare. Based on that,
people
should downsize the need
of
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meat
production to maintain
the
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land
quality. To express my own point of view and knowledge, there are several measurements that should be executed to redeem
this
problem
.
First
, apart from the
authentically
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meat
products
contain proteins for a body need, there
are
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a
tremendously
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source of plant-based
products
for example
beans, mushroom, spinach, tofu, etc., with higher alternatives (vitamins, micronutrition,) while
sustain
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the agricultural purpose. By far, these
products
are still considered to be edible and easy to grow without spending too
many lands
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and effort to raise compared to animals. Other
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for the problems arriving from the exceptional of
supplement
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industry, many scientists, researchers, doctors, have delivered a method of extracting those proteins containing inside the
nature
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products
and making them into pills or powder. Many athletes who are the most protein consumers are using Whey Protein powder
instead
of consuming
meat
products
is
the
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example
for
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this
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substitute
products
. Another way to reduce
the
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meat
consumption is
educating
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people
to become
a
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vegetarians or vegans.
This
eating lifestyle is somehow can ease the
problem
and may encourage
people
to be healthier both physically and mentally, reducing the factories effect for producing
meat
products
which lead to
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environment
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protection.
This
problem
would be caused by the fact of the world population explosion where
people
keep growing in numbers along with the
land
expansion needed to maintain the living standard (houses, farming, entertaining,). So, the requirements for
meat
products
would be raise day by day. Individuals should take
this
problem
seriously
for
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sustain the
nature
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condition for the future of themselves and for global exists.
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