The use of smartphone is decreasing our collective intelligence because we are reliant on the technology and not our own minds. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

It is argued that
people
's collective
intelligence
is negatively impacted by
smartphones
and they are overly relying on technology to solve problems rather than their own thinking. I disagree with
this
argument because it cannot be applied to all situations. The impacts of
smartphones
on
people
's collective
intelligence
are heavily depending on how they use them. If
smartphones
and related technologies are used as communication platforms and tools for
people
to exchange ideas and facilitate collaborative work, the collective
intelligence
of
people
will be positively promoted. Especially during the pandemic period, most of the work is carried out remotely, during which workers take part in team meetings, projects and
group
decision making via video calls and
group
chats functions on their phones. Without the emerging development of
smartphones
and internet technologies, it is impossible to support collaborative team working, not to mention the sparking of great ideas among groups of
people
.
On the other hand
,
however
, it is not deniable that some
people
completely rely on their phones to search for information and ideas for different questions and problems without trying to figure out the best options by themselves. More importantly, if everyone in a certain team does not willing to utilising their own thinking skills, but depending on the online searching functions with their phones, there is no way collective
intelligence
could be generated. In a long term, the unwillingness of using the individual and
group
minds to solve questions are nurtured by
smartphones
. To conclude,
smartphones
and technologies are great tools to elicit
group
thinkings and collaborative
intelligence
if
people
use them properly as communication platforms and tools.
However
, detrimental effects could
also
be found if
people
are completely reliant on
smartphones
.
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