Increasing the price of petrol is the best way to solve growing traffic and pollution problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree? What other measures do you think might be effective?

There is a school of thought that, raising gasoline pricing would help to prevent the number of
vehicles
entering
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the roads, and help to keep
environment
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clean. I believe that most of the time, we still have a chance to
use
the existing technology towards finding alternative
energy
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and to reduce crude
oil related
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energy
products in the market.
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the one hand, we can expect a reduction
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the consumption of
the
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fuel usage by increasing the prices. To be exact, when there is a high cost to be paid for
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petrol or diesel, people generally
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lowering
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their day to day expenses. When
this
happens, general people may tend to
use
public transport
instead
of using personal
vehicles
.
As a
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there is a probability of preventing
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number of
vehicles
in urban and sub-urban areas, thereby reducing the adverse effect on the natural world.
On the other hand
,
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of technology enhancement, in finding renewable
energy
Sources will result in avoiding undesirable effects that unbalance the whole eco-system. As an example electric
vehicles
will avoid air pollution, and introducing
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trains will directly involve
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minimizing congestions with fewer automobiles on road.
Therefore
it is clear that
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there are enormous alternatives that can be used to minimize fossil fuel usage and achieving cleaner
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. In my perspective, I strongly trust that
use
of renewable
energy
, as a replacement for crude oil will benefit both humans
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and our natural world.
However
, as the
first
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energy
concept, it is worth
to sell
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crude oil
in
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high prices.
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