You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write about the following topic: Some people think that parents should teach children how to be good members of society. Others, however, believe that school is the place to learn this. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion . Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words.

Education
has always been very important in
society
, learning
rules
and norms is a passage where everyone goes through.
However
,
people
think that it is up to
parents
to teach
children
how to be good members of
society
, whereas others believe that it is up to
school
and
teacher
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teachers
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to do that. In
this
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we will discuss both opinions .
Children
need to be able to evolve in
a
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society
and to be a part of that.
Then
they need a
first
education
which may be given by
parents
. Some
people
think that rudiments of
education
,
such
as
politenesss
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politeness
, kindness or respect must
be learn
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in the familial circle because, when
parents
have
children
, they must help them to grow up. They must give
an
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education
and it involves teaching
how
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them how
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to be
a good adults
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. It is easier to find our own way when we have the basic
rules
of
society
and when we do respect them. It may
looks
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surpising
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surprising
, but even if you are just teaching to say "thank you", "please", "good morning"
that is
one of the most important
rules
which can be used everywhere. Almost everyone can be welcomed with smiles with politeness and respect.
Moreover
,
children
past most of their
times
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time
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with
parents
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their parents
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and they learn by mimetics, doing the same things, and so
one
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.
Then
it's at the
first
age that any child must learn
education
in order to reproduce these
rules
without thinking about
this
.
On the other hand
, some
people
believe that it is up to
school
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to do
this
. At
school
, we need to learn, and by consciously or unconsciously
children
learn how to live in a little
society
because
school
is like that.
Then
,
people
think that it is to the teacher to explain the
rules
of
society
or laws because sometimes, some
parents
do not know them. It may
also
happen that
parents
do not have enough time to explain
this
to
children
. Others support that we all have personally different educations, but it is more valuable to have the same socle of
rules
thanks to
school
. Indeed, if we are learning how to be a good citizen at
school
, lessons will be the same for everyone,
then
each
children
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will live with almost the same
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values. I think that most of the
education
must be taught by
parents
but schools need to complete
this
because sometimes
parents
do not know everything.
School
is a complement to explain and teach us all the requirements
children
will need to be good members of
society
.
Thus
, for me, teaching
children
is a part-time job between
parents
and
school
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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