some people think that secondery school children should study international news as one of the school subject. give reasons for your answer and includ any relevent example from your own knowledge

Global
news
is crucial for every
indivuduals
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individuals
individual
in the world to know. Certain people have demanded
this
to be one required subject at
secondery
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secondary
school as learning about international
news
can improve pupils' critical thinking and broaden their
knowledge
. Knowing what
issue
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foreign countries are encountering and how they solve
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problems
helps
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learners to develop critical thinking skills. The class will
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them curious
the
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occurance
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occurrence
of various incidents and question what, why, and how certain countries act in
a different ways
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different ways
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with certain issues. Because of
this
, their thinking system
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to develop simultaneously. Thai students who study about the current US election have considered the winning of Trump, using their critical thinking skills and after
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it
is develop
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.
In addition
,
by
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doing
this
also
gives more
knowledge
to children. They will know more about other land's livings and situations rather than recognizing just their own country. Not only
they
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know about
news
, but
also
learn about the methods and solutions that other
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countries
use to tackle and
this
helps
further
their
knowledge
. Learning about
US
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election, Thai students
also
have a better understanding of the process
of
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it
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. In conclusion,
internatiional
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international
news
study enables children to extend both their critical thinking and
knowledge
. At the end of the day, if schools do not include
this
, students may be permitted
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extra brain
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.
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