Some say you should always marry for love; others say that in an uncertain world it is wiser to marry for money. Discuss both points of view and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience

Nowadays,
money
is one of the most significant materials in our
lives
. To many people, it is appropriate to marry for
money
rather than
love
.
However
, I believe that
both
love
and
money
should be
bouncetogether
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bounce together
bound together
in any
marriages
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marriage
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. Certainly,
money
is an important part
in
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our
lives
[TS]. It is hard for any
persons
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person
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to accept a partner which* does not have
money
or at least a job to take care of future family.
Hence
, said “marry for
money
also
has its right
in
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some extent.
However
,
love
should be the root of any
marriages
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marriage
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[TS].
Firstly
, it is because
love
is
such
a glue to connect two persons
which
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who
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have their own
lives
, become one (NC). So, they can share each other’s
the
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sadness, happiness to overcome any difficulties in daily
lives
.
Moreover
,
love
makes people growing up because they do not only have
responsibility
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a responsibility
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to themselves, but
also
to their partners as well.
That is
why marrying with
love
is always encouraged. In my opinion, I think that
both
love
and
money
is
both
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necessary [TS].
Marriage
relying on
money
would be rapidly disintegrated when unfortunately the
money
is run out.
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contrary
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*,
marriage
relying on
love
would sometimes come to end when they could not earn
money
to carry out family (NC),
such
as paying bills, buying food, etc.
Therefore
,
love
and
money
should stand together in
marriage
even though their contribution could be unbalanced (NC). As we have seen,
marriage
without either
money
or
love
would come to an unhappy ending. So I believe that they
both
have their own contribution to a merry family.
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