in the past, most people lived in small villages where everyone knew everyone else. nowadays, most people live in large cities where they only know a few people in their area. what do you think were the advantages and disadvantages of living in small community?

In recent years living in
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urban
cities
have become a trend. In old times
people
used to live in small communities where they know everyone around them but in today's
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people
know very few
people
in large
cities
. Living in a small area have
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both advantages and disadvantages as well and I will discuss both views in
this
essay.
To begin
with, the foremost
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of living in a small community is as everyone knows others they have the better communication skills. Due to that
people
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the situation of everyone better and they were able to help
people
in case of emergency.
For example
, in case of someone has a medical
emergancy
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emergency
on one call many
people
can gather around and help the person in need. Not only that but because of
this
people
have less
responsiblity
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responsibility
as they can look after each other. As they live within the
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they don't have to travel too much in case of need as it can save time for them.
However
, on the other side, due to less
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there are
less
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opportunities for
people
living there.
For example
, if someone wants to pursue a career in marketing as it is impossible to
achive
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achieve
big goals in small villages
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that they need
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.
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in large
cities
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they know
less
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people
that does not mean it is a
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bad
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bed
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thing. In fact, as they know few
people
they do not have to worry about other
people
's emotions. And in
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emergency
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they can always take
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of
techenolgy
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technology
to solve their problem as now technology
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replaced humans in all aspects. To sum up, I reiterate my
opinoin
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opinion
that living in
a big
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big cities
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cities
outweighs
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advantages on
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disadvantages. But with some
initiatives
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we can make even big
cities
more considerate with each other and we can expand our communication.
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