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Now many big cities in the world are increasing in size. What are the problems associated with it? What are the solutions to these problems?

#cities #world #size
An increasing trend of spreading out the big cities has increased potential to accommodate more
people
 but is associated with some drawbacks
such
 as requiring more
infrastructure
. The possible solution is to find more foreign investors who can generate wealth. Expanding the city is a positive step to provide as many
people
 as possible to live comfortably
instead
 of overcrowded.
However
, expansion required a hefty amount of money to provide better
infrastructure
 to dwellers,
such
 as affordable housing and transportation systems. Housing and accessible transportation systems make
people
 live comfortably and stay healthy, enabling
people
 to work more effectively.
As a result
, the new and expand community will live and survive in a healthy living responsible for community longevity and improve the country's economy.
However
, generating the capital can be challenging for any government, and, most possibly, increasing the tax amount for their citizens to pay may compromise the
people
's standard of living. The possible solution would be to develop
the
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 strategy to persuade foreign investors.
This
 could be
possibly
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 when the
Governmnet
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Government
 relaxing the immigration laws, minimizing taxes, and providing financial and life security, attracting
the
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international business franchise to open their business in their country.
Additionally
,foreign
invester
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investor
 will bring employment opportunities for the local public which eventually boosts the country's economy and generates money to provide user-friendly
infrastructure
 to the dwellers. In conclusion, spreading the city is a better initiative, but it should be associated with better
infrastructure
, possibly by generating enough funds with the help of foreign investors and the local public.
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