Some people think that paper money and coins will be replaced completely by credit cards and online method of payments in the near future. Do you agree or disagree with their statement?

People have been using
money
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for buying something or trade for many years. Some individuals support that
credit-cars
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and online shopping are useful than paper money and coins while others think that it is wrong. I strongly agree
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that
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first
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statement by the agency of more practical and spending less time. The
first
reason is that
networked
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method of payments is more practical than
bill
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a bill
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of exchange.
For instance
, when a teenager wants to hang out with her friends, she needs money but she does not wish to use
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cash
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as they are in her bag or her wallet takes up space. Whereas, she can replace them with something various.
Therefore
, most people prefer credit-cards because it takes up less space and it is
also
easy to use. The
second
cause is that spend less time.
Most
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population
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populations
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are doing online shopping because of
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a pandemic
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pandemic
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. When
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the corona
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corona virus
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coronavirus
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started in the world, most citizens start to use
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the website
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website
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websites
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for shopping. Some days, there was a curfew in
the
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most country and
that is
why they could not go
shopping
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to shopping
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mall
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. Yet, when the bans ended, people continued to shop online because they were getting less time and could see more clothes
in
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on
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less date
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. To sum,
up
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everything that has been stated so far, the world has been changing for lots of years. Some jobs are easily now.
Consequently
, the future is going to be of the online transaction and carrying the physical currencies will not be preferred.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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