Many people believe that the priority of the government should be to ensure a growing economy. While others believe that the government should focus its efforts on uplifting the less fortunate? Discuss both views.

It is important that a homey financial growth should be sufficient enough to meet the needs of the people, the recession of the country should be a priority of the governments because with adequate money the problems of the individuals at the present would be solved
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, with a growing ,economy the power can provide infrastructures that will help the fewer fortunate,
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if there are structures put in place to generate money for the growth of the rustic the recession will grow
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will help in more developments. without proper funds there won't be a successful uplifting of the less fortunate.
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the less fortunate needs support from the power to help
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thrive. There are no doubts that the authority
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a very important role in the life of the less fortunate by helping them provide materials that will assist them in their day to day living,
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could actually generate funds into the bucolic and reduce the stress
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that the government will provide materials, infrastructure, employment programmes that could help the less
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and for these reasons, there will be better-growing
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the homey that will aid adequate and better developments.
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