Idividuals can do nothing to improve the environment; only governments and large companies can make a different. To what extent to you agree or disagree. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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is sometimes argue
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that who can do something for
for
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environment
.
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government
goverment
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and large companies have a great influence but
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individual
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can
paly
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a great role. I completely disagree with
this
idea
individual
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can do nothing to improve the
environment
.
Environment
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is
a
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most important
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for
earth
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. But day by day we polluted our
environment
by
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many ways.
For example
,
people
cut down trees in a large number, use of plastic, number of
vahicals
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vehicles
increase and industrial pollution. It is true that
for
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overcome that problem government is a big part. Without
help
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of
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government
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goverment
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it is really difficult to overcome
from
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this
. Because they have a responsibility
for
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save nature and every country have a foundation for
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environment
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the environment
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.
For
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improve
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the
environment
thay
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that
they
can take many steps.
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motivate general
people
, take steps
for
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plant
tree
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trees
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, banned plastic and make
punishment
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for cut trees.
Also
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government
goverment
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can make
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eco
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for
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save animals because animals
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a
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important part of
environment
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. Some
organaization
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organization
also
play
role
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for
improve
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environment
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On the other hand
,
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individual
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have a great responsibility
aslo
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also
. They must plant
tree
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trees
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besides
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their home and if they cut down one
tree
they should plant two or more
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. Common
people
is a big part of
improve
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environment
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the environment
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.
Althrough
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, most of the time they make pollution, But it is
also
true without common
people
it is really
dificult
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difficult
to improve
environment
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the environment
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. So that, if they help
goverment
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government
and maintain rules
then
it will be easy for overcome for that problem In conclusion,
goverment
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government
, large companies and common
people
all together an make
change
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in
environment
. So all are important
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