Some people are concerned that children spend too much time on computers - playing games, chatting and watch video. But all this time is actually good preparation for children, who will have to spend many hours working on computers throughout their education and working lives.

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Nowadays, people are starting using computers especially teenagers

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children

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and some people claim that

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expirience

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for children to spend their

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, improve their skills for future work, while others think that

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I will discuss both views and give examples. On the one hand, kids become

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on games and

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point of issue. What

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mean by

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science

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for kids.

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and will wear glasses for defending weaning from the

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it will be awesome for children

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, they may already be adapted and will be more effective than

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level of skills

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companies

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experience and

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strongly believe that people can combine both of these sides

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