Some countries today have passed laws against smoking tobacco in public buildings such as offices and restaurants, other countries have no intention of doing this. Consider the possible argument on both sides of this debate, and reach your own conclusion on which side your favor

It is often said that smoking
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in
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place
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should be reduced.
However
, some countries allow citizens to
smoke
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view. On the one hand, those who support smoking tobacco brings benefits for people. They point to evidence from research which tobacco reduce obesity and stress level. People are getting calm and release stress after using
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with their coworkers. Smoking is not
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way
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stress it can
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help maintain weight.
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, some countries
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forbid
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in public places. To the supporters of the idea, these benefits are convincing.
However
, opponents of
this
view that
this
affect citizen’s health especially for younger children and pregnant woman. In these cases, tobacco has hazardous substances which could develop cancer for people who are around
smoke
users.
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because of
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.
For example
, whenever I try to meet up with my boss, he is out of
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due to smoking which is struggling for those employees who do not
smoke
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This
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appears to be quite powerful. Overall, I would tend to side with the countries where forbid public smoking. It would be
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decision among all citizens for their health and well-being.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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