All parents want the best орportunities for their children. There are some people who think that schools should teach children skills but others think having a range of subjects is better for a children's future. Discuss both sides and givе your opinion.

Some parents think that
school
is necessary and it gives to
pupils
knowledge about math, geometry and history while
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think that
school
should teach
pupils
some profession
such
as architecture, builder, driver and so on. Personally, I think that learning is
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important thing in our life. In
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i
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will discuss both views and give my own opinion.
Firstly
,
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should say that knowledge adorns a person and he will be more confident if he will understand all. What
i
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mean by
this
is that
pupils
should get information at
school
and enter the university.
For example
, if we compare excellent
pupil
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and bad we can understand that they
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different worldwide and
persentage
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percentage
of productivity in
work
from British resources.
This
fact claim to study.
On the other hand
, we can understand that skills
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important for
pupils
for one reason thinking.
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it means that they can start to think as
elderly
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an elderly
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person
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people
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and
work
with them as well as they can.
For instance
, I have a friend his name is Michael and he
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to
work
without study at
school
because he
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to
work
at
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summer
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and start to love earning money. In conclusion,
i
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strongly recommend
to
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studying and learning
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the subject
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subject
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subjects
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as well as you can .
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